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It was all about finding those edges where the shore met
took a trip at first, a little dip to test the water, tea-brown and murky
but swimming was easy and keeping one hand on land
was like trying to climb a mountain of sand
and the tide, a rip, took us out to sea

It was all about keeping your head above the water
because you'd never see the monsters underneath in that lightless place
but they could only get you when you got tired or
when it got too hard to escape that place
deep-space diving got dangerous

It was all about coming up for air to fill your lungs
and trying to keep the hair out of your eyes even though you couldn't see
it felt safer, like running at night, faster and silent
but the only way was down and deep
with all the added weight

It was about remembering what floating was like back when you could always
put your feet down and walk out when you were done swimming
or when the water got too cold or when you just needed
to get someplace dry but now every direction is
the same just wet and cold and tea-brown
like someone let the air out of the room
and all the deep breaths wont
fill it back up
again.
Ten-minute assignment.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-08-08
Tea Brown is by ~evermore ( Suggested by Goldfish-In-Space and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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Karinta Aug 9, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow. That was just ten minutes? Astounding work ethic and metaphorical skill are displayed in this poem.
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Craazhy Aug 8, 2013  Professional Writer
Marvelous.
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the-beastie Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can't believe you wrote this in ten minutes! This has a wonderful pace to it. Lovely words.
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evermore Aug 8, 2013  Student Writer
I should probably set my account to notify me when things actually happen on it. I didn't even realize this was chosen for a Daily Deviation. Thanks for all the kind words, internet strangers.
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chancerox Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
absolutely beautiful. this goes along with a lot of things in my life right now~ 
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:iconhyperanimegirl4lyfe:
10 minutes? good gosh. you have some mad talent! i loved it! :)
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CupOfShit Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Strangely beautiful.
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AChan-Adopts Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful work! Congrats!
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ShonaliKapoor Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconcongratsddplz:
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:iconcole-y:
astoundingly beautiful.
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